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We both argued, we both spoke words we shouldn't of. They were like daggers to the heart, tearing holes in my heart, in our trust
Why didn't I stop? I could of stopped but I didn't
The argument was getting too far, too hurtful. More daggers were being thrown, so I ran as far and as long as I could.
I was terrified of the truth
The truth hurts I have heard, now I know that is true.
Why didn't I stop running? I could of fixed this, but I kept running…running away from the arguing, from the truth
Now regret is tearing at me. Is it tearing at you too?
Why didn't I stop? I could of stopped but I didn't
The argument was getting too far, too hurtful. More daggers were being thrown, so I ran as far and as long as I could.
I was terrified of the truth
The truth hurts I have heard, now I know that is true.
Why didn't I stop running? I could of fixed this, but I kept running…running away from the arguing, from the truth
Now regret is tearing at me. Is it tearing at you too?
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Very impacting, dear. :]
I like that you didn't submit this piece as prose... because the very fact that it's poetry makes it different - if that makes sense. The way it's formatted and just generally written makes the reader focus more on the pain of the words.
The only things you might want to change would be:
First line: We both argued; we both spoke words we shouldn't have. They were like daggers to the heart - tearing holes (you might not want to repeat the word heart) in our trust
Second line: Why didn't I stop? I could have stopped - but I didn't
Third line: The argument was going too far; it was too hurtful. More daggers were being thrown, and so I ran as far and as long as I could.
Fifth line: The truth hurts I have heard and now I know that is true.
Sixth line: Why didn't I stop running? I could have fixed this, but I kept running…running away from the arguing, from the truth
I was also wondering if writing this in first person present tense would make it more impacting. But that's for you to experiment with. xDD
Hope you're feeling better, dear.
Very impacting, dear. :]
I like that you didn't submit this piece as prose... because the very fact that it's poetry makes it different - if that makes sense. The way it's formatted and just generally written makes the reader focus more on the pain of the words.
The only things you might want to change would be:
First line: We both argued; we both spoke words we shouldn't have. They were like daggers to the heart - tearing holes (you might not want to repeat the word heart) in our trust
Second line: Why didn't I stop? I could have stopped - but I didn't
Third line: The argument was going too far; it was too hurtful. More daggers were being thrown, and so I ran as far and as long as I could.
Fifth line: The truth hurts I have heard and now I know that is true.
Sixth line: Why didn't I stop running? I could have fixed this, but I kept running…running away from the arguing, from the truth
I was also wondering if writing this in first person present tense would make it more impacting. But that's for you to experiment with. xDD
Hope you're feeling better, dear.